Caramon Zero, the Crimson Hero

[Caramon Zero]

Caramon Zero
The Crimson Hero

RACE,

Hybrid: Oocca/Goron/Hylian/Human

GENDER,

Male

BATTLE ROLE,

Jack of All Trades

BATTLE STYLE,

Story, Casual, or LS (When absolutely necessary)

AGE,

25

ALLIANCE,

N/A at this time.

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PERSONALITY,

Positive

• Morally Convicted
  
• Trusting
  
• Loyal
  
• Kind
  
• Caring

Negative

• Gullible
  
• Indecisive
  
• Restless
  
• Forgetful
  
• Slow-witted most of the time
  

APPEARANCE,

Caramon Zero
has large white wings with crimson tips that can change into a cape on his back, or a cloak around him, a broad, crimson torso, as if it were made of stones stained in blood, and gold and crimson armor covering all save his wings. Although he has most of the Oocca and Goron genes, his face is Human with Hylian ears, and his hair is made of soft, crimson rock fibers that can be cut and grow back. Though he's as tall as a Goron, he's thinner and more agile than those of the "Pure Bloods", making him lighter so he is able to fly despite his thick skin and strong bones.

WEAPONS,

A pair of large Zweihanders:

Heaven's Blaze, black, with crimson flames, and the magical ability to transform the sword and wielder into anything they desire, but due to the physical limits of his wielder, he can only transform either himself or his wielder, the latter only having his physical form and abilities changed so as that he may not become separate entities, and not both simultaneously until the wielder becomes more adept with the blade and the use of his powers, as well as increasing his own physical prowess.

The sword itself being a separate entity means that he too has his own life gauge, yet it diminishes at a much slower rate than that of his wielder.
When his life gauge is fully drained, he only loses his ability to transform, and cannot do so until he is repaired by his wielder, as the sword cannot die, yet his wielder can still be defeated.

LS: Heaven's Blaze has the power to transform him or his wielder into specific things based on which is transformed: creatures when Caramon transforms, and weapons when Blaze does so.

This, however, is not applicable until both the living sword and wielder are fully synchronized, as in both have at least half of their max health, and when it goes below half they revert back to their original states.

Level 1:
Caramon:
He transforms into a black and white Lizalfos.

Blaze:
A set of blue and crimson gauntlets and shin-guards.

The transformations give him an extra half gauge of damage to his attack, as well as decreasing damage inflicted on them by half a gauge.

Duration: 2 posts
CD: 4 posts


Heaven's Light, white, with a light blue lazer-like blade, with the magical power to harm an enemy to heal the wielder or an ally, yet it must make contact with them first.

LS:Heaven's Light has the power to drain a foe's health, store it within himself, and give that many levels of health back to either his wielder, or one of their allies by touching them.
Higher levels allow more damage to be "leeched" up to a max level of 3.

Level 1 drains half a level of health from the foe, and each subsequent level transfers an additional half level of health into the sword.

Being a living sword, Light still has his own health gauge, so when his health gauge is depleted, he can no longer heal until repaired by his wielder.

Cool Down between Healings: 1-3 posts depending on half-levels of health transferred to the one being healed.

Note:
During Blaze's transformations, Light is absorbed into his wielder's body, but his powers are still usable, as they are transferred to his wielder instead, yet they can still only be used after first striking the opponent.

ITEMS,

A gold "watch" with a silver, forward-facing lion head on it that was given to him by his parents with an odd hole in the center of it, as though something were to fit into the lion's mouth. It is said to house a great power, yet no one knows what it's for, nor how to unlock its seal.
He also has a large crimson crystal pendant with an odd glowing blue symbol in its center that he found in the remains of his old home after one of the wars that cannot be altered by any conventional means, yet he has no idea of its importance, or its connection to his family.

He also has a black, blue, and crimson guitar that he acquired from a man that lived in the woods that he trained in, who gave it to him as a reward for discovering what had been stealing his food. It appears to be hand-made by an expert craftsman, as it has an pdd symbol carved into its head. He has learned how to play it on his travels and plays it whenever he has a chance.

ABILITIES,

None as of yet
shop.

RACIAL ABILITIES,

None. Due to the diversity of blood flowing through his veins, it does not allow a single race to govern him, but having all the races within him working together in harmony.

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HISTORY,

Born from a half-Oocca, half-Hylian mother, and a half-Goron, half-Human father, Caramon was unique even for a Hybrid. His mother died soon after he was born and his father died in one of the Great Wars that swept the land long ago, leaving him to fend for himself for a large part of his life until he was able to harness the natural abilities of his parents' races, as well as learn more from the world's people about how the world is both an evil and beautiful place to live in. Seeing much hardship and strife taking over the land, he moves into action to protect those who cannot defend themselves saying "Only Cowards prey on the Weak, and only the Strong can protect them!" This is his ideal, and this is what he stands to do. But can he do it? Only time will tell.

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EXTRAS,

None as of yet.

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FACE CLAIM,


Caramon Zero, [i]Complete and Original. Straight from the mind of a crazy teenager.[/i]


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OTHER CHARACTERS,

None

HOW DID YOU FIND US,

Old member of Shattered Spiral and Lightning Storm.

[Ryst Seraphine]

Okay, good start but there's a bit of work first.

1) Dragons are not a race. You're going to have to review the Monster race and work within those limitations. The Monster race is designed to make monsters of the Zelda canon into playable things. I can say dragons are possible, as I had a dragon character on the previous site, but it was a transformation in the abilities, not a species.

2) It wasn't clear in the rules, so nothing against you (our head admin is a flop sometimes ಠ_ಠ ) but characters shouldn't be over 50 years old. This is for plot reasons and it would mess with the canon otherwise.

3) You're going to need to elaborate on the history some more. History isn't necessarily there to explain racial abilities, but to outline what the character has done, notable events from their past and such. Pretty much everyone and their moth--okay, pretty much everyone on the site has had their parents die on them. What makes your character special, y'know?

4) The Racial Ability for monster races is basically an extra ability slot, much like the Humans get. Listing off things like Strong Heart is irrelevant to the ability and would be a waste. That's a character trait, not an ability. Try to differentiate those.

Okay, sort those things out and we'll work from there. We'll get you up and running soon, or my name isn't Quill Liele Fang Ryst.

[Caramon Zero]

Well, I fixed it back to the original way i wanted it, and have a 146 word history, but unsure if it'll be enough...

[Ryst Seraphine]

Interesting to see such a diverse hybrid, however there are a couple more issues brought up by that switch. Nothing complex, just a few small things with the mechanics. When a character is a hybrid race, they pick one of the races and that's their dominant race. This doesn't affect much but which of the racial abilities they get. If you click HERE you'll get a list of the races, and in the second post on that thread are the racial abilities. Look them over and pick which ones you like most. Those are the racial abilities. You don't make them up.

However on that note, each character gets two magic slots. This means if you want supersonic flight and super strength you can do so. If you are human dominant you get three slots, since that's their racial ability. When you pick these abilities, which are 100% for you to decide, so get creative, and since you specified LS-style in your CS, you'll need to translate the ability into LS-style, found HERE. It's not that hard. Just click on my signature to see my character sheet and see what I have. You can get really creative with abilities.

Also, do the swords do anything in particular? By their pictures it looks like they have abilities. If they do, then you're going to need to take the two abilities you normally get and apply them to the equipment. My other character, found on the site as Tabula Rasa, is a good example of using equipment abilities instead of normal abilities. Check her out if you need ideas.

Once more, work on those and we'll go from there (may be tomorrow, as I'm going to bed soon).

[Caramon Zero]

Well, I added the LS stuff and the sword's abilities.
I tried to think up something that could be feasible for their abilities, I hope it saves you a bit of trouble that you have to help me with.

[Owen Enders]

I'll jump in here and try and speed this up a bit for you.

Heaven's Blade
The issue here is that it literally allows you to transform into anything that you wish, which could be a tad overkill depending on what you transform into. Imagine your opponent's expression if you like... transformed into a bunch of dragons or something and just destroyed them. There needs to be a limit as to what you can transform yourself into.

Likewise, your cooldown on the ability is very broad as there are no clear boundaries nor designation as to what is defined as a powerful transformation. It would be entirely up to you to decide the classes of power and their relative cooldowns. You would need to clearly specify the boundaries here.

In short, because this is supposed to be a starting ability, you can't just transform into anything. You need to power it down and limit your transformation options. I would advise starting off being able to transform to something small-scale like an animal and then having a particular cool-down on that depending on how long you hold the transformation (example; 1 turn = 3 post cooldown, 2 turns = 4 posts cooldown). Something like that.


Heaven's Light
Does the draining ability work only when the sword strikes the opponent, or can it drain regardless of whether it's made contact with the enemy or not?

[Caramon Zero]

Alright then, I elaborated on his abilities, and explained their limits and effects based on what I could come up with.
I know it's a lot of reading, I'm sorry, but I was angry about something at home and put down whatever ideas came to mind.
So anyway, I've updated it and hope that there aren't many more things that I need to do so that I can enjoy the new site to its fullest.
Thanks for the help.

[Owen Enders]

Um…. Ok.

Maybe I’m not being clear enough, but you’ve misunderstood what I meant by the fact that you can’t transform into anything you want and that Heaven’s Sword and that this is supposed to be a starter ability. You can’t transform into multiple things with that technique with different levels, if you wish to do that then you need to upgrade the ability over time on the forum by acquiring the money to upgrade the ability.

So,

What you need to do, I’m assuming you wish to keep the idea you’ve got there, is basically have it so that this ability only transforms you into one thing for a certain amount of time. So, you could take the Level 1 stage for this ability and use that and I think that’d be acceptable. This is supposed to be a starter ability, so you can’t do all of them, you’ll have to build that up through upgrades. Essentially, you’ll start with the Lizalfos transformation and when you have enough money, you could purchase an upgrade allowing you to transform to the Level 2 stage, but you can’t have all of those levels now, just the first one.

Save all of that information into a Word doc for later on though, because it’s a nice ability and it means you can then just copy and paste it all across later on for the upgrades.

In short, this is what you need to do for Heaven’s Sword:

• Edit it so that you can only transform to Level 1 for now.
  
• Clearly state with Level 1 the effect it has on your character; strength/speed/whatever boosts and how much it is. It should really only upgrade the damage of your attacks by one level and perhaps weaken damage dealt to you by a level at most.
  
• Apply the limitations. Ideally, the cooldown would be the amount of time spent in that form plus an additional 2, so 5 turns in that form would be a 7 turn cooldown before you can use it again, 4 would be 6, 3 would be 5, etc.
  

That would then be acceptable.

As for Heaven’s Light, the sword would only need to drain health when it strikes a person. It can’t drain health after it has struck them at random, only when it strikes, essentially like a leech bite. Wasn’t perfectly clear from your description. I think the draining amount is fine…. I think, I’m not really sure as I don’t understand most of what you’re on about with that weapon description.

[Caramon Zero]

I'm truthfully not trying to sound like an ass about this...
Well, technically, I put all the levels at once for the transformation, and can only use Level 1 at the start, but am able to access the others when i upgrade, I just put the info for all the levels and i put the data as a whole, yet still telling that I'm only able to use it at a specific level, and my CS needs to be edited to say which level I'm on when I upgrade.
And yes, Light's power can only work by actually striking the targets.
So technically I did what you asked, as well as explain that the transformation at Level 1 lasts 1 post with 3 CD and so on and so forth in the actual data before the transformations.
I've only written these up so I can remember them for when I do acquire the "Level Ups" and can apply them.
I'm sorry if I didn't make any of these things clear, and I will try to rewrite some of it ASAP so that I'm not the only one who can understand the powers and such, and will do my best to keep everything in track.
I'm sorry for bitching about all this, it just took me about 12+ hours of straight work to get it to work out a way I could understand it....
If you truly wish me to just remove the rest of the Levels and ask you to post them up as they go up, then I'll accept your decision.
Thanks for the help, and sorry for all the trouble.

Would this work better?

[Owen Enders]

Yeah, I think everything in there works fine, if you could clear up some of the stuff like:

Heaven's Blaze has the power to transform him and his wielder into whatever they wish for a maximum of 5 posts based on the size or power of the object or creature that they become.

... and just generally tidy the descriptions up (as you've got a lot of numbers flying around that makes reading things a bit of a headache chore) and give me a shout when you've cleaned it up, that should all be good.

[Caramon Zero]

Alrighty then, I suppose that's about all I can do to him.
Oh, and I made sure to clarify what happens to the other sword in the transformed state in his own ability section.
Thanks for all the help and if I need to do anything more, don't hesitate to point it out.

[Owen Enders]

Ok,

Technically, you have 3 abilities here. Heaven's Blaze: Level 1 and the two Level 1 abilities in Heaven's Light: healing your character and healing the sword. Now, you don't have a racial ability through your own choice... so technically you've confined yourself to 2 abilities. Now, if you were human dominant, you could possess a third ability through the Flexibility slot and those would all fly. Otherwise, you've limited yourself to only having 2.

[Caramon Zero]

Didn't realize a part of a single ability'd be counted as a whole new one...
Alright, took out that bit. Now only Caramon can fix the swords.
If there's anything else I need to do, just tell me, and I'll get it done ASAP.

[Owen Enders]

I have purposefully delayed going to bed as I saw you fix this. Two long weeks after you posted this up, I... believe I can safely say:

2/3 APPROVED!

[Azler Wilder]

Because of the LS stuff in here, I'm going to ask Rwaht to read over this stuff to make sure its all okay as I may be missing something, but for the moment, it looks good to me.

APPROVED!

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Go nuts buddy lol